You may ask what this has to do with bid writing, but let me come onto that in a moment.
In his victory address, Barack Obama spoke with passion, "If there is anyone out there who still doubts that America is a place where all things are possible, who still wonders if the dream of our founders is alive in our time, who still questions the power of our democracy - tonight is your answer."
Stirring stuff. No doubt, in the years ahead, many will relate those words to the magical speech of the Rev. Martin Luther King. But there is one enormous difference between the two men - Obama is now in a position to make the words a reality in a country that is ready for change.
But let's get back to bid writing - reality returns with a bump. What can Barack teach us about bid writing? He can teach us
passion.
Too many times, we read bids that are written without passion. If you are an evaluator, tasked with reading 10 bids, how would you feel if you came across just one sentence like Obama's? Excited? Thankful? Interested enough to continue to find out what this organisation has to offer?
It doesn't take a presidential script writer to create passionate prose, words that excite and demand attention. With practice and care, and the help of Google and the written media, you can steal some ideas from the good and the great.
David Ward, our Chief Executive, takes up the story. "My personal favourite is Lord Coe, then Sebastian Coe OBE, leader of the London bid team for the 2012 Olympics. His summary letter to Count Jacques Rogge, President of the International Olympic Committee, is a mastery of passion and prose that urges you to read further.
"In the same bid, Ken Livingstone, the then Lord Mayor of London, takes a different tack but still speaks with eloquence and passion. It's marvellous stuff and you can find it here
http://www.london2012.com/news/publications/candidate-file.php with Coe's letter in the 'Conclusion' and Livingstone's immortal prose in the 'Introduction'. If you have any doubts about Livingstone's ability to write (or his scriptwriter's if you're cynical), then have a look at Tony Blair's letter in the Introduction. Bah Humbug boring!
"The whole bid is here, in all its glory. Some of our bid writing delegates have diluted its value, saying its for such a large project that the lessons don't relate to them. But they're wrong. Lessons can be learned and applied to all bids. We teach many of them in our workshops and use the passion of Coe and Livingstone to inspire others. It works. Try it! Perhaps we'll add some of Obama's magic as well."
And that's the secret to passionate prose. Try it, see what works for you, but remember that you're writing for the evaluator, not yourself. Try to use words that will appeal to them, assuming you know who they are, of course. But that's another story!